So he sat there, silent and unmoving until Martin’s hand shyly sought out his and clasped it tight, and Danny wished Martin could take comfort as readily as he offered it. But he didn’t say this either, only hitched himself closer until he felt Martin’s hesitant weight against his shoulder.

Don't know why, but this part actually made me gasp for breath. There's something about your writing style that is so magnetic and it keeps pulling me in deeper and deeper into the story. Up to the point where I can actually feel what the characters are feeling.

So very good. Looking forward to the next part.

Oh, and ... if I were you ... I'd keep the ending. It's very powerful and it works