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aesc ([personal profile] aesc) wrote2007-05-21 11:23 am

.riffs, or, when aesc does kid!fic

[livejournal.com profile] slian_martreb admitted to me that, after yesterday's beach!fic she was imagining "a five year old Rodney and John, playing in the sand and making castles with Rodney being oh so particular about the placement of each grain before John divebombs a plane into it."

And so, because I'm apparently susceptible to suggestion, I wrote my first-ever piece of kid!fic. Oh my God. Riffs off of beach volleyball, only with sandcastles, and seven-year-olds. (Five-year-olds are completely alien to me.)


Once he'd managed to get the sand-to-water ratio perfect, he started building, if you could call sandcastles "building." At least the sand was holding together and the huge turrets of sand weren't collapsing, which was about the only thing that had gone right today.

Within about three seconds of setting foot on the beach, Rodney McKay had decided he hated it. A lot.

"We've spent a lot of money on this vacation, so you're coming with us," his mother had snapped when he'd begged to go back up to their hotel room. Even at seven and a half and three days, Rodney knew enough to know that air conditioning was much more enjoyable than sand and heat, and water that evaporated and left a sticky coating of salt on your skin, but his mother was impervious to logic.

Building sandcastles wasn't a complete waste of time, though. Completely ridiculous materials, of course--crude plastic tools, sand, nothing to measure with--but he sort of liked the challenge.

He wouldn't mind living in his sandcastle, come to think of it, behind a huge moat filled with alligators and great white sharks. With a drawbridge, with him safe in his turrets and his parents and Jeannie on the other side of the moat.

Just as he turned to look for the plastic spade to start digging said moat, he heard an unearthly eeeeeeeeeeeeee approaching swiftly, and just as he turned back to see what it was saw a whirlwind of dark hair, long arms and legs, plastic, and a huge grin.

"Direct hit!" shrieked the whirlwind as it picked itself up from the sand.

"My castle!" shrieked Rodney. Ruins.

"The F-4 Phantom never misses." The whirlwind by now had settled down into a boy around Rodney's age, skinny and unfortunately taller and probably capable of beating Rodney up, like most of the kids at school.

"You wrecked it." He glared at the other boy, who was dusting fragments of Rodney's castle off his model plane. "You wrecked my castle."

"Sorry," said the other boy, not sounding particularly sorry at all. He collapsed in a gangly heap next to Rodney and his ruined masterpiece. "It was a lousy castle anyway. Where're the guns?"

"They didn't have guns back then. Don't you know anything?" Rodney began to gather the sand into a pile so he could start again. "They had bows and arrows and stuff."

"Oh." The boy turned the plane over in his hands, as though contemplating what Rodney had said. "Maybe you should build a future castle, so you could have guns. Like on TV."

"Whatever." He scooped huge handfuls of sand into buckets, and hoped that, maybe if he ignored him, the kid would go away. The kid didn't budge, though, and even offered Rodney his name.

"Rodney," Rodney said sulkily. "Make yourself useful and hand that over."

John smacked the shovel into Rodney's hand, then reached for one of the other buckets and started filling that.

"You have to swear not to dive-bomb this," he told John in the tone he usually reserved for Jeannie. "Pinky swear."

They pinky swore on it, and John even parked the plane on a flat strip of sand that was supposed to be the runway. Rodney had to concede that, despite his wild hair and stupid remarks ("Where're the guns?"), John was pretty good at sandcastle-building, and John told him that his family came to this beach whenever his dad was back "stateside."

"We come here never," Rodney said. "This is our first time."

"Maybe you can come again next year," John said, which was a very stupid and hopeful thing to say, and Rodney thought about how we've spent a lot of money on this trip, which meant they'd probably be spending next summer with their grandparents.

He said yes, anyway, and John grinned, a huge dopey grin that Rodney had to tell him was huge and dopey, and John threw sand at him.

So Rodney had to throw sand back, and soon the castle was destroyed, but the F-4 Phantom was safe on its runway.

-end-

ETA: Find out what happens six years down the road in [livejournal.com profile] foxxcub's really freaking cool comment!fic!
ETA2: And another wonderful continuation by Anon!
ETA3: More! A two-parter, even, by [livejournal.com profile] cobweb_diamond.

This is fun :)

[identity profile] chebonne.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 03:44 pm (UTC)(link)
I don't know if I commented on this when you put it up on the comments before, but annnnyway.

Kid!Rodney! How adorable is that! And John, divebombing and them playing and... *melts into incoherent puddle by cuteness* awwwwww

[identity profile] inthekeyofd.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 03:59 pm (UTC)(link)
It's funny because even then, they had the McShep banter going on..AND how freakin' cute are they!!!!

Oh, OH, they pinky swore...this is too adorable!!

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 05:05 pm (UTC)(link)
*meep!!!*

I feel like I've created a monster. A glorious, sand-filled, sun-warmed monster of awesome.

Also, I am not getting ANY WORK DONE because I'm just sitting here thinking of John and Rodney on beaches and playing volleyball and whatnot.

[identity profile] slian-martreb.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 05:18 pm (UTC)(link)
Seven year old Rodney arms of yay:

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This is your fault.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 05:35 pm (UTC)(link)
The following summer, John runs along the beach with his brand new plane and waits to catch a glimpse of a boy studiously building castles in the sand, his shoulders hunched in deep concentration, the tip of his tongue caught between his teeth.

But the faces on the beach are all new and not familiar, and he doesn't quite know what to call the emotion that bubbles up inside him. Years later, he'll learn to recognize the melancholy disappointment that follows hope and expectation.

It's not until the summer after he turns thirteen that he spots him, and it's strange how nothing's changed. Rodney's still sitting in the sand, only he's not building castles, he's reading a text book and rubbing his knuckles over his chin. Still lost in that intense concentration. He's thinner, his body longer, and John finds himself wondering if he can still look down at the top of Rodney's head when they stand face to face.

He doesn't approach him right away--after all, it's been so long, and maybe Rodney doesn't even remember him--just sort kicks around at the water's edge and pretends to be fascinated by the sailboat bobbing out in the distance. After several minutes, he's managed to end up not ten feet away from where Rodney's sitting.

Finally, with his cheeks feeling too hot, he calls it, "Hey."

Rodney's head jerks up and he blinks at him. Then, to John's ridiculous pleasure, his eyes go wide and he smiles the dorkiest smile John's ever seen.

"H-hey." He closes his book. "No plane?"

John shrugs and tries to play it cool. "Naw, not anymore. I mean, I've got nicer ones, ones that can't, y'know, get sand on 'em." He's trying desperately not to mimic Rodney's grin.

Rodney nods. "I was going to make a castle, but I think the tide's about to come in."

"'s probably better than studying, though." He gestures with his bare foot to the text book lying at Rodney's side in the sand.
It says Introduction to Elementary Physics on the spine.

"Probably."

"Um...I could help out." He shoves his hands in the back pockets of his swim trunks and hopes he sounds bored.

They don't have any shovels or pails or anything between them, just their hands. But Rodney still ducks his head and looks away, mumbles, "Yeah, okay," and John thinks his stupid family vacation is finally worth something.

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[identity profile] chebonne.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 06:01 pm (UTC)(link)
*flail*

*flail some more*

*falls down dead*

You... both of you... kill me with CUTE! Oh, John, all studiously bored, but both of them begin so gosh darn happy to see each other...! You melted my brain.

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[identity profile] chebonne.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 06:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Er... *being so gosh darn happy.

*headdesk*

[identity profile] rain-dances.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 07:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Ohhhhhhh...

I have gone completely stupid.

Boys.

So sweet.

I love how seven year old Rodney sounds exactly the same as he does now.

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[identity profile] rain-dances.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 07:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww.

I...

I don't even know what to say.

They're such dorks! I love it.

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[identity profile] geeklite.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 08:42 pm (UTC)(link)
aesc's fic, combined with this, has left me with a ridiculous grin on my face.

Oh, boys.

[identity profile] yarnaddict.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 09:10 pm (UTC)(link)
A-freakin'-dorable! =)

[identity profile] shara50.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 10:01 pm (UTC)(link)
That was very awww worhty ;)

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[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 10:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Seriously, this could be, like, a series! As [livejournal.com profile] aesc said, this whole beach theme is like a cancer--um, the good kind. *g*

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[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 10:37 pm (UTC)(link)
They are!! *loves them*

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[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 10:38 pm (UTC)(link)
*picks you up*

Yay for melty brains!!

[identity profile] aesc.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 11:02 pm (UTC)(link)
I can't quite believe I wrote this. *blinks* But I guess I did.

[identity profile] mecurtin.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 11:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, *I*'m grinning from ear to ear.

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[identity profile] slian-martreb.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 11:32 pm (UTC)(link)
I think that this He shoves his hands in the back pockets of his swim trunks and hopes he sounds bored. is the best line in the whole thing.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 11:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay!

[identity profile] chebonne.livejournal.com 2007-05-21 11:37 pm (UTC)(link)
And the masses cheered. You should do it more often. And maybe, just maybe, tell us all if they still remember this meeting when they're closing in on forty on Atlantis? *hopeful*

[identity profile] mcalex22.livejournal.com 2007-05-22 12:25 am (UTC)(link)
Aw, I love kidfic! I love it that they still complement each other as kids despite the different personalities. John would be that kid with the airplane. Rodney would be the little one with fair hair, big blue eyes and an smug mouth... but soften by John.

Thanks - I love it!!!

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(Anonymous) 2007-05-22 12:39 am (UTC)(link)
They use their hands, mostly, digging their fingers into mounds of damp, cool sand; piling and shaping and smoothing the grains into towers and spires and curving walls that held up much better than they had the last time. Rodney tries scratching patterns into the surface with a thin, brittle branch of tide-smoothed driftwood, but it doesn't look quite right, so he and John erase it with their fingertips, Rodney ducking his head to the side to cover a sudden blush when their fingers slide together in a sandy-rough caress.

When they're done making the castle the foam of the tide is licking against the beach inches from their feet, and Rodney picks up his book and follows when John starts to walk, seemingly aimlessly, across the beach. They don't say much, either one of them; it doesn't seem like they need to.

The heat of the sun batters against their exposed skin and warms Rodney's hair until it feels like it's baking and the scent of his shampoo finds his nostrils every time he turns his head.

They don't walk far. John stops and sits on a rocky outcropping and Rodney flings himself down beside him, almost afraid that standing like a target will mean John will suddenly look at him and see that he's not the kind of person John would usually hang out with. Rodney watches John watching the seabirds, his messy, dark hair flying about in the salty breeze.

"I'm going to fly like that one day."

Rodney can picture it: John, taller and older and impossibly cool, tanned hands on the controls of a plane, guiding it to do whatever he wants.

"I don't know what I'm going to do," Rodney says, his fingers curling around the edges of his text book. For the past year he's been searching for something that makes him feel like music had. His parents have been pushing him to do this, or try that, or for gods sake make a decision about what he wants from life and do something about it, because genius means nothing without focus.

"That's cool," is all John says, his foot swinging back and forth, brushing close to Rodney's leg every so often. Rodney leans back and closes his eyes and lets his spine relax and his sandy foot swing into John's.
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[identity profile] fullygoldy.livejournal.com 2007-05-22 12:55 am (UTC)(link)
Awwwww....I'm loving the tag team approach to this story! This was a great addition.

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[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-05-22 12:58 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, YES. Yesyes.

Rodney ducking his head to the side to cover a sudden blush when their fingers slide together in a sandy-rough caress.

Sweet, dorky boys. *sighs longingly*

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[identity profile] aesc.livejournal.com 2007-05-22 01:46 am (UTC)(link)
Yay! My fault! Candy bar!

(I'm sorry, I just watched Nothing while hunting for more DH screencaps and Andrew Wallace is terribly and psychotically cute.)

He shoves his hands in the back pockets of his swim trunks and hopes he sounds bored.

I could see and hear teenager!John doing this--laconic, no big deal, and really, really hoping they can build that castle. And Rodney's just as "Yeah, whatever, it's juvenile anyway, pfft" and then the two of them in the sand with their bare hands and yay! *devolves into incoherent squee for a while*

(Though one thing I noticed: If this is riffing on canon!verse, Rodney's already built his [completely non-operational] atomic bomb by the time he's thirteen, so he's probably writing insulting comments in the margins of gauge theory texts by now *g*)

But his reaction to seeing Rodney for the first time in years, oh how wonderful *asplodes a bit*

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